“A Cluttered Bedroom” {flash fiction}

“My room reminded me of a charged minefield– but that was only after I was able to get the door open. “


Heya! I thought y’all might enjoy this descriptive composition I wrote for grammar schoolwork a while back.

The topic assigned was “A Cluttered Bedroom” and yes, I sadly had to use their very uncreative name. πŸ˜₯ πŸ˜› I used spatial order (sort of) and tried to include the five senses.

Drawing inspiration from the current state of the bedroom I share with my two college-student-sisters, this is what I came up with. Enjoy…? πŸ˜‰


_A Cluttered bedroom_

A Cluttered Bedroom

366 words, by Anna Willis

My room reminded me of a charged minefield– but that was only after I was able to get the door open. It took three hard shoves before the pile of stuff on the other side budged, and I could finally shoulder my way inside.

My toe struck a hard textbook half hidden by a ruffled dress sliding from the back of my desk chair, and I yelped, hopping on one foot, only to lose my balance on a stray hair curler.

Dropping to the carpet I dismally surveyed my bedroom while rubbing a sore toe. This floor certainly was like a minefield; it was hopelessly cluttered.

Books, pencil stubs, tight balls of school paper, clothes, and shoes were littered all over. The air smelled strongly, dangerously of nail polish. Digging my fingers into the carpet, I could see it for the first time in a while to remember what shade it was.

Then a thought struck me and I dove on to my bed, carefully avoiding landing on the old plate of spaghetti at the end.

I froze. I strained my ears. But all I could hear was an aggravated fly trying to escape right through the window glass… over and over and over. Poor thing would probably go insane pretty soon from being stuck in my room. I would probably too.

My mind started to panic as I searched high and low from the safety on top my lumpy mound of pillows. Where was my dearest? Had I lost him once and for all?

Then I drew a deep breath, choked on the dust I inhaled, and hung my head over the side of my bed. Pushing aside a wasteland of used tissues and dirty socks I snatched up the faded sock-monkey that peeked out.

β€œOh there you are, Mr. Darcy!” I whispered in the monkey’s ear, β€œWe’ve got some work to do.”

I propped my friend on the bedpost, tugged my curls into a ponytail, and set some peppy music playing full blast. Trash bag in hand, I launched myself at the clutter and moments later my room was no longer a minefield of doom.

The air tasted of happiness and accomplishment.


 

Can you relate to this description?

My MC is obviously a busy college student with a festive view of life. What random things would we find in your bedroom to tell us what kind of person you are?

Do you share a room with a sibling (or a sock-monkey)?

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I think this is almost how Mr. Darcy the sock-monkey looks πŸ˜‰

Should I write/post more flash-fiction type things? Hope you enjoyed this silly little bundle of words! πŸ™‚ ~A

24 thoughts on ““A Cluttered Bedroom” {flash fiction}

  1. Have you been sneaking around my room??? πŸ˜› loved the story! Though it would take me years to organize the massive pile. XD
    I have a stuffed monkey. I’d like a sock one though. πŸ˜‰

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    1. Bwahaha! No, actually, but I have the feeling a lot of rooms look something like this MC’s room. πŸ˜‚ (Wow, it’s bugging me she never got a name. Lol)
      Aw, stuffed monkeys are pretty cool too! πŸ˜‰
      Happy you liked the story!! πŸ™‚

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  2. AWWW!! This was so awesome!!! Man, it reminds me SO MUCH of when my room got cluttered really badly (I should get a medal for Most Incredible Mess Ever πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‰). Please write more!! I always love stories!!! Btw I love and miss you girl!!! ❀❀❀❀

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    1. Aw happy you liked it, Penny!!
      Hmm idk… I’m afraid you might have some pretty good competition for the Most Incredible Mess Ever medal… πŸ˜‰
      Thanks! xD I’ll have to set aside some time soon to write something more for you amazing people. πŸ™‚
      You too, lady! ❀

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  3. Lol, that was so fun!!! Yes I do share a room… With ALL my sisters!!!!! It’s fun, but you can imagine how messy the room can get…. Or maybe you can’t. xD Thanks for posting! πŸ™‚

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  4. This was hilarious!! I share a room with all five of my sister’s (So six of us total) and it’s not a large room, by any means. I can so relate to this — three sisters are over 16, so there’s more clothes and nail polish and books and just general clutter from them (And myself!). And then the others are under thirteen, so there’s dolls and toys and games and more books and more clothes. It’s a circus act to get in — and even when we buckle down and clean it really well, which happens to be about once a week, it still ends up a disaster zone πŸ˜€ The worst thing I ever stepped on was a pin cushion turned upside down while holding a new baby sibling in one arm and a laundry basket of clean clothes in the other. That was a balancing act, and the clothes ended up on the floor =P Every. Single. Pin. in that thing came through to the bottom of my foot.
    We really do try though. Really and truly….=]

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  5. It was adorable, Anna! I love it. My room is rather clean, except for my dirty clothes…But I clean them up every other day. XD I’m kinda in the middle of messy and clean, so I guess I’m neither extreme. (I feel like a poet at the moment. AH! BRAIN, STOP IT!)

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    1. Thanks, Amie! Haha I’m the same actually… I get the room really messy and then enjoy cleaning it and organizing everything again… idk why. lol
      (bwahaha! I just envisioned a book called “Amie Bedelia” for some reason… okay, I’m dying now…)

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      1. Amie Bedelia? You have permission to write it, LOL! Hey, that’s funny we’re both messy and clean at the same time. At the moment, I look like the opposite of clean, though. XD

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    1. Ikr?!! I actually need a sock-monkey too after writing this. πŸ˜‚ What would you name yours?
      Okay cool! I’ll have to do more flash fiction sometime soon! I should look through my “files” to see what I have written already… Hmmm…

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